tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8414761376461915818.post5678524063137511613..comments2011-12-30T00:24:26.967-08:00Comments on 99 Stories & Pieces: 3) The Drop Inkleer001http://www.blogger.com/profile/10560812341527368496noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8414761376461915818.post-48542294242368750832011-12-23T23:20:04.873-08:002011-12-23T23:20:04.873-08:00Grammar Nazi :-)
And your flimsy jumpsuit... Los...Grammar Nazi :-)<br /><br />And your flimsy jumpsuit... Lose the 'the'<br /><br />"We're getting your readings, we know you're awake" Added comma<br /><br />"... other than that, nothing really" you say... No need for full stop<br /><br />"... flashes of images or associations?" the voice says... No need for full stop or capitalisation on 'the'<br /><br />"Yeah, I can do that" you say... No need for full stop<br /><br />Other than that, there are a lot of full stops, which makes it read a little stilted, may wish to consider making some longer sentences with commas instead. However if this is an intentional style decision then please disregard.<br /><br />Hope this helps :-)Bonnie Hensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04019358264494942743noreply@blogger.com